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Some parents buy their kids a large number of toys to play with. What are the advantages and disadvantages of a child having a large number of toys?

There is no denying the fact that many
parents
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 are buying their
children
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 a lot of
toys
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 to play with. One school of thought opine that it is worth it, whilst others consider and thinks that a couple of problems
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 occur because of the same.
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 has a plethora of merits, some demerits are
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 there which will be elaborated on
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. Initiating with the best possible benefits, the most significant advantage is
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 can work worry-free. To elucidate
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, working
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 usually have a hectic schedule which means they can not give plenty of time to their offspring. If
children
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 will engage themselves with
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, it will help
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 to focus on their job.
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, educational
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 can be good for
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.
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 a child's learning through developing their logic and problem-solving skills, encouraging communication skills and nurturing their creativity.
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, a recent study held at
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 Complex in Pakistan has shown that puzzles and blocks like gaming
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 play a vital role in
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's intellectual development. On the paradoxical side, there are many drawbacks as well.
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 and foremost,
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 with many
toys
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 often spend time indoors.
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 might result in a lack of physical activities which in turn causes a number of health problems
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 as heart disease and obesity.
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, a study run by an Oxford professor has shown that 90% of
children
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, who have a lot of
toys
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, are overweight due to a decline in outdoor activities in the USA.
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,
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 could affect their confidence level as teens will only play with
toys
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instead
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 of making real friends. In conclusion, without any doubt,
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 is a mixed bag. If
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 topic has many positives, the negative points of
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 notion may not be underestimated.

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