IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 7.5

Stidents should pay tuition fee by themselves. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#stidents #tuition #fee
Schooling certainly needs money to support the teaching processes,
for example
 funding the infrastructure, paying the teachers' salaries, and maintaining the quality and comfort of the facilities. Those usually are charged to pupils in the form of tuition fees. The more enhanced and complete the facilities, the higher it will be. Even though it is a fair price to pay, the societies' finance differs by a quite large gap.
This
 essay will elaborate on some relevant criteria for getting free tuition fees or what we called scholarships.
Firstly
, education cost nowadays is much higher compared to ten years ago and many families have higher income due to the pandemic effect.
Moreover
, a certain schooling level is needed as one of the requirements to get a good job,
such
 as a bachelor's degree. Those conditions could possibly lead to the poor will poorer.
Hence
, the government incorporated with the private sector have to fund the students with some criteria to have a high education level.
For instance
, children who pass the required exams, show a strong interest to learn, and come from poor financial backgrounds are eligible for scholarships.
Secondly
, the investors must coordinate with the schools or the colleges for giving the scholarships in order to ensure the correctness, effectiveness, and efficiency of processes.
In addition
, that coordination enables them to monitor the study progress of those students who are funded. In that way, poverty will not become the reason for people not to have proper discipline. As long there are strong will and effort, ones could have the chance to study, gain more knowledge, and
finally
 improve the family's welfare. To conclude, I opine that wealthy families need to be encouraged to pay their children's tuition fees because they have more than enough financial ability on it.
On the other hand
, the poorer ones are eligible to be funded in their studies under some conditions as explained above.
Submitted by smart_girgu on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: