Is it better for students to live at home with their parents or in school accommodation? Give your own opinion on the issue. Use your own experience or an example to support your idea.

Nowadays, the number of students that move
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other cities to study
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better universities is drastically increasing. Generally, their parents rent them a single or double
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in a shared flat, where their son or daughter has to share some places like the kitchen and the bathroom.
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of solutions. In fact, there are many others.
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, there is the possibility to buy an apartment, there is the possibility to work for old people (preparing meals, and doing simple gigs,
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their dog for a walk) in order to have a
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in their accommodation for free and so on. Personally, the one I chose when it was my time is a school accommodation. Basically, it works like the
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solution I exposed:
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a
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in a shared flat on the
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storey of a university block of flats. After five years
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here, I’d like to affirm it is the best solution, the one I would re-take if I travelled through time. Now, I’d like to provide some of the advantages of renting a
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,
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living with my parents in order to support my thesis. The
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that stands out is the sense of responsibility. Since
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been living alone,
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learned a lot of things about the
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,
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mutual respect,
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managing
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discussion
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, etc.
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,
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experience provides me
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job opportunities. In fact, since
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been in the metropolis where my university is situated,
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received a lot of interesting offers. If
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the possibility to tell more, I would describe more about
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changing life experience, but, unfortunately, it isn’t. To sum up, I really recommend
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yourself in whatever experience you face
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because it’ll literally change your personality,
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way you see the world, making you a self-conscious adult.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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