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These days, many people have their own computer and telephone, so it is quite easy for them to do their job at home. Does working at home have more advantages or more disadvantages?

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Nowadays, with the strong technological development, life becomes easier and easier, especially
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work
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. Some
people
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 believe that they can
work
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 from
home
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 effectively by using their own computer and
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mobile-phone
. From my point of view, I totally agree with
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 statement and I think that working at
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 can bring
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people
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 more benefits than drawbacks.
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 do not have to go to
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, they can reduce both
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 and
money
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consumptions
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.
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, when
people
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work
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 online at
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, they do not need to ride their
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 to the
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. It helps them save
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instead
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 of wasting a lot
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 paying gas and insignificant fees relating to transportation.
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,
people
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also
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 can save
their
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time
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 without moving to the
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 and
stucking
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stuck
stocking
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traffic
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a traffic
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jam
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 that, when the employee
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 at
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, the employer
do
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 not have to invest
to
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 much
on
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 infrastructure
such
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,
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and electric
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electric
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 fee,... Thank
to
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that, the leader of
business
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a business
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 can use
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money
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the money
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 for improving job
efficient
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 and paying
high
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 salary for
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labor
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In addition
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,
people
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 can
work
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 more effectively when they have a chance to
work
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 at
home
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. It can not be denied that when
people
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do
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don
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 not go to the
office
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, they can get more attention on their
work
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. There are a lot of things in the
office
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can
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that can
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 distract them from
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 like co-workers, noise and drama.
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, if
people
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 can
work
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 at
home
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, they can get their own comfort and private zone which can help them pay more attention
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work
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 without being disturbed by unwanted things.
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,
people
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 can take care of their
family
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families
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 if they
work
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 at
home
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. It can be seen that, by using
computer
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computers
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 and telephone,
do
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all the
task
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tasks
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 become easy and simple so
people
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 can spend more
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for
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 their family and household chores. In conclusion, I am totally for the view that doing
job
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 at
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 is more
advantages
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 because it
help
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helps
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people
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 not only save
time
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 and
money
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 but
also
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 get more attention on their
work
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 and family.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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