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Nowadays, traveller can go to distant and remote areas such as North Pole. What are advantages and disadvantages?

#traveller #areas #pole
In these
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 days technology has made a lot of
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improvements
improvents
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improvements
. One of these is about travel, space travel included. Some people think that
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 new places could be
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invaluable
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valuable
 for the time the
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habitat
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 areas will not be
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enough
enoght
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enough
 for all humans. For
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 reason, many scientists and
mathematics
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 are working on some way to
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coloniality
 spots
such
 as the North Pole.
On the other hand
,
this
 type of travel could be
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perilous
 for travellers. Take the
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 of connection as an example of the difficulties. Personally speaking, I don't totally agree with none of these two groups. I think
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science must be more laboratory experiments before doing something practical, like putting lives in danger. Without
doubt
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, these
unhabitated
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inhabited
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 areas are plenty of resources
such
 as petrol, water and so on. So
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energies
energyless
 could be
interesting
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 aspect to consider.
Firstly
 it must
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 the aim of those travels: are they made for
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pleasure
 or in order to find new
renuavable
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renewable
 energies, and lands where
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cultivate
cultivated
 vegetables, and where to grow animals (cows, for
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instance
istance
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) up? If it is the
first
, I'll totally disagree.
Instead
 of
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the
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biodiversity and
the
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humanity they'll disrupt definitely the planet. To sum up, I'd like to conclude my
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responce
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suggesting
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 to make
researches
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 on the topic, in order to not gets worst the environmental situation.
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