It's been seen that reading for pleasure develops imaginations and better language skills than to watch TV. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There is no doubt that these days technologies have developed and
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suitable opportunities not only for learning a new
language
but
also
the Imaginative
skills
. Some people believe that skimming through books and newspapers
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efficient than watching
tv
. I agree
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a large degree with
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statement. On the one hand, enjoying watching
tv
with friends or relatives is one of the most ways to strengthen imaginative
skills
,
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speaking, and listening
skills
.
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most famous and interesting series
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as
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‘’Game of Thrones’’ which is
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long series
in
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tv
. I had
great
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time
watching
this
series with my friends.
This
is a method that
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us not only enjoy our
time
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guide
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us to enhance our English
language
.
On the other hand
,
although
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tv
is much
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, reading novels
are
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much
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for educative and imaginative
skills
. Compulsive reading could build more specific details about some stories and significantly boost
language
skills
rapidly.
For instance
, Studies in
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States of America show that people
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novels during their free
time
will have more chance to widen their knowledge in
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period of
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, as it
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the reader to highlight vital information in order to get back easily. In conclusion,
although
watching movies
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some advantages, reading books will improve the sense of imagination as well as accuracy in learning
new
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language
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • develops
  • imaginations
  • better language skills
  • watch
  • TV
  • agree
  • disagree
  • enhances
  • promotes
  • passive
  • engaging
  • stimulate
  • creativity
  • balanced
  • approach
  • beneficial
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