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Most people prefer shopping in supermarkets nowadays. How does this affect the local shops? What are the positive and negative impacts of this development?

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In recent days, the majority of the population dependsupermarkets for shopping. It is important to understand, how
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 trends impact local shops and daily business. An aforementioned new drive of shopping affects local outlets in both positive and negative ways.
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, considering the convenience , time management and availability of versatile items under one umbrella; shopping malls got much popularity over local stores, which affects adversely ordinary shop businesses.
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, shopping centre often gives offers on their products, which attracts the crowd to shopping plaza rather than small shops.
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, accessibility to different transaction options at plazas drives the crowd towards them.
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,access to cards , food coupons etc. The positive side of increasing shopping complex dependence can be counted under different sectors. The primary advantage is convenience ,
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, if I want to get versatile items
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 as groceries , sweets, vegetables, ice cream etc., a shopping hall would be an appropriate option to find all of that at discounted rates.
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, small outlet owners have better interaction with customers and will be taking care of regular needs and the scope of improvement of the product.The local showroom
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 provides flexibility in payment,which benefits , poor people. If Arcades take over the local stand , it impacts the normal population. On another aspect, a bigger market is controlled by corporates for selling their product.
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 forms in situations where corporates control our food choice. In conclusion, increasing dependency on arcades creates a positive and negative impact on local emporium business as well as our intellectual capability of food selection.
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