In many countries, the amount of crime is increasing. What do you think are the main causes of crime? How can we deal with those crimes?
It is true that in most prominent
country's
crime rates has been increased lately, Change noun form
countries
this
has been due to various reasons. Correct word choice
and this
However
, unemployment
and lack of education would be the key factors which represent the higher percentage in
criminal cases. Change preposition
of
Thus
, the government has a significant role in mitigating this
issue. This
essay would further
discuss the causes and solutions to this
situation.
Firstly
, most countries
have faced various issues due to higher unemployment
rates, this
issue not
common to each geographical area Add a missing verb
is not
such
as in developed countries
the unemployment
rate is at extreme
stage due to technological development Correct article usage
an extreme
on the other hand
underdevelopment countries
suffering due to lack of jobs and economic crisis. However
, the end results would be quite similar whereas we can identify a growing number of drug trafficking, smuggling and robberies due to the root cause which leads to unemployment
. Even though the cases are unacceptable given the situation people tend to rob others mainly due to hunger. This
is a sensitive factor which government should overlook from a broader perspective.
Secondly
, the lack of education we can see most of the children quitting from
school from the early days of their lives, Change preposition
apply
this
happens frequently in third
world countries
such
as India, Sri Lanka and Bangladesh as result of this
trend we can notify most of the students to tend to do odd jobs in order to look after their families. This
has a connection in relation to unemployment
in the long run. Social research have
identified that most Change the verb form
has
of
Change preposition
apply
the
children have become thieves in various gangs which has a serious impact on the country's future.
In conclusion, education and employability playCorrect article usage
apply
Add an article
a
role
when Fix the agreement mistake
roles
come
to crime management Change the verb form
coming
however
government and relevant authorities should have to play a responsible role in community management yet it will cause detrimental effects on the country's future.Submitted by sumendrid on
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