In many countries, the amount of crime is increasing. What do you think are the main causes of crime? How can we deal with those crimes?

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crime rates has been increased lately,
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has been due to various reasons.
However
,
unemployment
and lack of education would be the key factors which represent the higher percentage
in
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criminal cases.
Thus
, the government has a significant role in mitigating
this
issue.
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essay would
further
discuss the causes and solutions to
this
situation.
Firstly
, most
countries
have faced various issues due to higher
unemployment
rates,
this
issue
not
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common to each geographical area
such
as in developed
countries
the
unemployment
rate is at
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stage due to technological development
on the other hand
underdevelopment
countries
suffering due to lack of jobs and economic crisis.
However
, the end results would be quite similar whereas we can identify a growing number of drug trafficking, smuggling and robberies due to the root cause which leads to
unemployment
. Even though the cases are unacceptable given the situation people tend to rob others mainly due to hunger.
This
is a sensitive factor which government should overlook from a broader perspective.
Secondly
, the lack of education we can see most of the children quitting
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school from the early days of their lives,
this
happens frequently in
third
world
countries
such
as India, Sri Lanka and Bangladesh as result of
this
trend we can notify most of the students to tend to do odd jobs in order to look after their families.
This
has a connection in relation to
unemployment
in the long run. Social research
have
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identified that most
of
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the
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children have become thieves in various gangs which has a serious impact on the country's future. In conclusion, education and employability play
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when
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to crime management
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government and relevant authorities should have to play a responsible role in community management yet it will cause detrimental effects on the country's future.
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