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Since money for postgraduate research is limited, some people think financial support from the government should be only provided for scientific research rather than the research for less useful subjects. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#money #research #people #support #government #subjects
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Postgraduates are facing difficulties in that having lack
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funds for their research. While there are some people
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 that the governments should give most of their
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 to the
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that is
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 highly effective in terms of the
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countrys'
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 development, I am convinced that all the major is equally important to be entitled
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 same amount of funds. Admittedly, it is true that
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science
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the science
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field
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 contributes to the major part
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 developing the country. To be specific, space, technology and healthcare, which
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 the key parts in order to
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 a better
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quality
qulity
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quality
 of life are all related to scientific studies. There is no doubt that these subjects require rich materials and sometimes
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 placements, which
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 never cheap.
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, only focusing on
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science
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field
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 can be seen as a sound investment in
that countries
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 with advanced scientific research are
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guaranteed
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guaranteed
 to be well-developed.
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, I believe that other parts of the studies deserve the same level on how much the government consider the
science
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field
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 crucial. Apart from
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, liberal arts should not be neglected in terms of the fact that it is influential to the economy. To be specific, countries where there
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number
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 of famous artists and
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widely
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widely
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attracts
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attract
 myriads of tourists, which
eventaully
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eventually
 aid in boosting the country's economic level.
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, as
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 only support
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science-related
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science related
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 major, people will likely
to
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avoid studying in
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field
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 that
have
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 poor educational conditions.
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, the country will have a huge
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gap
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gab
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gap
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 between
science
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 and other liberal arts, which will result in a devastating impact on the economic level. In conclusion,
although
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science
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 is considered
as
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the most useful
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 of study for the government, I am
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 of the opinion other subjects should not be deprived and finances need to be well balanced between all the subjects.
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