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Air pollution is one of the largest problems the world is facing today. What are some causes of air pollution and what measures can be proposed to solve this problem?

#air #pollution #world #measures
One of the biggest
problem
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world
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the world
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 is facing today is
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the polluting
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polluting
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pollution
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 of
air
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the air
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.
This
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about
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the
problems
 that can be the causes of
air
pollution
first
problems
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problem
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 is emissions
CO2
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of CO2
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 and Methane from
electrostations
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electrostatics
second
 problem is
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forest
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forests
 fires and
solution
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the solution
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 to
this
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these
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problems
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problem
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 is
transition
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the transition
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 to alternative
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clean
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clear
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clean
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energy
 and
improvement
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the improvement
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 of
fire
 control. Today
humanity
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humanity's
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 attention was paid to the
pollution
 of the
air
 the causes of which were emissions of C02 from power plants and
forests
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forest
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 fires. Today humanity
use
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uses
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 more and more coal, oil and other fossil fuels which made a lot of
energy
 and greenhouse gases when
burn
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burning
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on
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in
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 power stations,
this
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 gases became the main cause of
air
pollution
. Earth
have
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a
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many ways to
polluting
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pollute
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air
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the air
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 one of
this
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which
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 is
burning
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the burning
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 of
forests
, trees like coal made a lot of carbon dioxide when burn and
pollute
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pollutes
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air
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the air
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.
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 in 2020 when
forests
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the forests
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 of Siberia and Australia was engulfed in flames they made 300
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million
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millions
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million
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of
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cubic meter of carbonic acid. People have
a
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many ways to solve the
problems
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problem
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 of
air
pollution
this
is
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as
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 using green
energy
 and
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the development
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development
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developing
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of
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fire
watch
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watches
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 in
forest
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forests
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. Clear
energy
 is
that
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the best way to
reducing
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reduce
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air
pollution
 because
this
energy
don’t
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doesn’t
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 produce greenhouse gases and
inexhaustible
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unlike
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 oil. And control of
fire
 can reduce the level of carbon dioxide and save ecology with ecosystems. As an example in 2021 when burned the
forests
 of Argentina firewatchers paid attention in time and eliminates the
fire
there by
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thereby
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 saving the forest and atmosphere. A conclusion people have
a
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many
problems
 with
air
polluting
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pollution
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, but they can solve them before it’s too late and
this
 became to
unfixable
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the unfixable
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 issue.In
recommendation
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,recommendation
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 people must have attention
on
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to
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 nature now not when it’s
began
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begun
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a
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unsolvable trouble.
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