In many countries, more and more people choose to buy imported food rather than food produced locally. Why do people buy imported food? What could be done to encourage people to buy local food?

It is true to say that the number of
people
who consume imported
food
has increased. There are many reasons why
people
buy
food
from abroad rather than
local
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one.
However
,
government
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the government
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can do so many activities to keep their
people
buying
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from buying
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domestic
food
. Most Individuals consume Imported
food
because it has usually better
quality
especially
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shape
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,
color
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, taste and packaging. The exporting country has sophisticated technology which can make it happen.
In addition
,
although
it has to be transported far away, most imported
food
is cheaper than local
food
.
For instance
, in Indonesia,
Apple
from China is more affordable than
Apple
from Malang. In fact, China can produce
apple
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apples
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in
large
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the large
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amount
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. So, they can reach
economic
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of scale which
make
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their product
low cost
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.
Therefore
, according to
quality
and price, most Indonesian will choose
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an apple
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apple
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apples
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from China. For
food
security and economic development,
Government
will encourage their citizen to buy
food
made domestically. One policy that
government
can do to make it happen is
imported
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an imported
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food
tax.
Beside
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increasing revenue for
government
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the government
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, it will make imported
food
more expensive.
Therefore
,
the
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local
food
can compete with them on
the
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price.
Furthermore
,
government
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can give training to farmers about better
method
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methods
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and technology that they can use.
Consequently
, their output like vegetables and fruits will improve. So, they will not
inferior
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from
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imported
food
and more
people
will consume them. Recently, because of its
quality
and price,
people
would rather import
food
.
However
,
government
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the government
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can collect imported
food
tax and improve local
food
quality
to encourage
people
to consume them.
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