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In the past,important knowledge about culture and history was stored in museums. Nowdays,information is freely available on the Internet;therefore,there is no longer any need for museums. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays,there
are
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a great deal of
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 resources which come from social media or some websites to employ as well. As far as
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 am concerned,thanks to more convenient appliances
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 as electronic books and Internet
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, we would fail to spend our precious time
to walk
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giganic
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gigantic
organic
museums
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 or libraries to look
for
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 our history.
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, I reckon that I would agree with I would visit
museums
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. More and more
people
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 would forget
their
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 important memories which they undergo their histories
such
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 as
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 generation in Taiwan.On account of we are bound to find
these precious incidence
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, I would definitely choose
visiting
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 historical spots and
museums
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 that looking for valuable and real things. It is
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absolutely
absoloutely
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absolutely
 acknowledged that the ancient
people
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 would remain their treasures in their residential place.
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, as far as I am concerned,
people
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 would save
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time to go to
museums
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instead
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 of surfing the Internet in order to search
their
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 culture and histories happening. It
is believe
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 that
the
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modern
technology
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technology's
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 invention improve
more and more faster
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 than ancient
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generation
gerneration
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generations
,
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 so that we could easy
to
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find a wide range of what we want on the Internet right away.
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, I think that one of the
drawback
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which
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is consider
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to
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the data
whether
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is real or uncertain. What's more,it is unreal that we would feel fake and non-according
for
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 previous histories and sculptures. I firmly believe
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I disagree with it is no use to need
museums
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.
To
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 conclusion, I would reckon that the
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existence
existance
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existence
 of
museums
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have
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considerably
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 importance
on
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 our life. It is
prove
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proven
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 that ancient
people
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 play
the
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 role on the island.

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