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Some people believe that we have nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#people #choices
Being provided with many options living in
this
last
 century is a blessing that human
beings
 need to be grateful
.
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This
 means that every single person in the world is given
a
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 freedom to opt
what
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for what
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 he
/
she would like to pursue and raise in
life
. A matter of living and figuring our
lives
 out
by
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on
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 our own is discussed in the following essay. Right now, we as human
beings
 are provided with many chances, for
instances
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instance
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, to select what
do
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we want to do for
living
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, what
do
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we want to study, whom
do
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we want to spend our lifetimes, and where
do
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we want to spark
joyful
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.
This
 is a matter of people
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themselves
theirselves
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themselves
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acknowledge
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 what they want to have in their
lives
. Take a case
of
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job
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a job
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 we want to have as an example. In Asian
country
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countries
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 like Indonesia, there are a
lot
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 jobs that both men and women can select, based on their level of knowledge, skill, and interest.
Besides
, a matter of gender
also
 will not be problematic because women,
for example
, can be
technician
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technicians
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,
architecture
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architects
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, or any professions that men were usually dominant in the fields.
This
 means that they can be in those professional jobs. Alternatively, even
we
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if we
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 are not in good situations or destiny, we still have chances to select what things are out of our prepared and planned goals.
For example
, we possibly have many failures in
life
,
such
 as being rejected
in
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by
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 reputable universities to study the most
favourable
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 subjects there.
However
, we always have flexibility in terms of starting and selecting other preferences in
life
 that most people never consider
them
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apply
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before. From the bottom line, enormous choices in
lives
 will always be provided if human
beings
 attempt to discover inside the earth.
Nonetheless
, not many choices, considered good opportunities, always come when human
beings
 really need them that much.
This
 usually occurs when we are merely urged not to select the most preferred options.
For instance
, a case of someone who has been trying in applying for scholarships for 20 years of his
/
her
life
 should not be applying
it
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anymore.
A fact
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 that he or she should not have spent
lives
for
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so long just
want
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wanting
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 to study
,
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 because the spent time
for
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waiting can be used for accomplishing what he
/
she really wants.
In other words
,
this
 case insists on someone
to select
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selecting
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 the
last
 chance so that she directly finds other alternatives that may change the position he
/
she really wants.
This
 statement refers to believing and accepting that not everything in the world can be easily accessed and selected based on our
owns
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. To sum up, we clearly can choose what things we want to have and reach in
lives
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our lives
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, but we need to be sure that
not
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no
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 opportunities we witness in
this
 world will be easily acquired as our belongings.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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