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These days people are living into their 90's and beyond. As a result, there is increasing concern about care for the elderly. Do you think it is the responsibility of the family to care for their elderly members or should the government be held responsible?

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Due to the development of
healthcare
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the healthcare
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system
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,system
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people
 tend to live longer when they did it early. Nowadays, society
have
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 faced with a question about responsibility for
the
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apply
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old
people
. In my mind, the government should be obliged to social and health welfare. On the one hand,
people
 who live in cities tend to have nuclear families. The reason is the speed and cost of
life
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living
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 in megapolises. In that case,
people
 don’t have
time
 to care for their parents.
Moreover
, the old generation need not only care and medical help, they frequently need
a
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company. It is crucial for
well being
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well-being
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 to have a pleasant
time
 with others. Unfortunately, the modern lifestyle doesn’t provide a lot of
time
 to spend with family, and the old generation
have
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has
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 to watch TV all day long. In that case, retirement homes can be a win-win choice for all.
On the other hand
,
people
 in developing countries
such
 as India, Iran,
Azerbaijan
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and Azerbaijan
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, often live in extended families. Adults and their children take care of the old generation.
Moreover
, some of the countries are very religious and have strong traditional values.
This
 is the main reason
of
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for
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 close-knit families. It definitely gives some positive effects on
emotional
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the emotional
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 conditions
for
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of
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elderly
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the elderly
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 but they
also
 need qualified medical help from
time
 to
time
. To sum up,
the
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apply
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old
people
 should have access to the medical system. Due to the cost of health
insurance
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,insurance
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 it must be provided by the government, As far as family members are concerned it is a personal decision.
Although
 retirement in the family circle is the most pleasant choice.
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