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Does the educational success of a student depend on the teacher or the attitude. Discuss both view and give your opinion. Some people ar

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academic successful
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whether
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depend
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 on the instructor or the attention of
student
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the student
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. In my opinion, to achieve
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educational success, we need to pay way more attention
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 schooling. There are several
reason
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 why
success
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 of the education
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 on the educator.  
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, most
student
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 are   achieving  good
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result
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on
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 the educational field,
as a
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result
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 of their instructors’ good and satisfactory
knowledge
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. Even lots of pupils’
knowledge
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 getting better compare to their
teachers
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, of course, after
teacher
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 taught the learner with
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good
knowledge
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.
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,
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 a large number of humans believe that
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teachers
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teachers'
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 composition on the
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students
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 educational success is far
more high
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 and
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dependable
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, I believe that
students
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’
attitude
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 is much
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achieve
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the
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academic
successful
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 rather than
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teachers
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 position. For
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although
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teachers
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 hard  
teaches
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 and pay more attention to
students
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,
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the pupil
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pupil
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pupils
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 may not have an interest or outlook for
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 lesson. Afterwards, they may not accept
these
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knowledge
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 and all of
attempts
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of
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the teacher
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teacher
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teachers
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 might be   nickel-and-dime. A good example is that Isaak Nyuton had everlastingly motivation and
attitude
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 to
physic
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the physic
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  subject and with the help of
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attitude
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, he was able to do
self- study
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, and
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this things
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 showed its own good
result
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 on his educational field and he
was manage
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 to become a famous inventor for his incredible inventions. To conclude,
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 there are more benefits of
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the teacher
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teacher
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teachers
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 on the
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students
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 academic
successful
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,
but
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I feel that the
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students
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student's
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 own
attitude
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 the educational field is far more important rather than
teachers
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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