In countries, crime is increasing. What are the main reasons for this? What can be done for this situation?

Crime has been at an alarming rate in a number of countries. Due to that serious issue,it must be looked out the fundamental reasons and addressed
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by implementing some effective measures in order to diminish it as possible as we can. With the regard to
this
ubiquitous trend,several reasons are required to deeply explain and
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this
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behind
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problem
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.To commence,the poverty circle in some countries is growing very dramatic.
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lack of education and limited job opportunities.
As a result
, indigents or uneducated persons go on
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trial
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instance,jobless individuals
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not own income
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too often
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the law by stealing money to support their
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.
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.
Furthermore
, wealth is unfairly distributed which brings about corruption in
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society .So,
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those create
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widespreading
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widespread
in globalization.
On the contrary
,diverse possible ways can effectively address
this
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dilemma
.
Firstly
,distribution of wages should be fairly distributed to minimize the
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disparity
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dispute
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and wealthy people.
Secondly
,severe
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penalization
is incredibly essential to deter offenders from wrongdoing like
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impression
impresion
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impression
.
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, providing
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social welfare and insurance.Take,
for example
,
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subsiding
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for low social and economic
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to assist them to live better.
Consequently
,these
such
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solutions are definitely helpful for lessening
lawbreak
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lawbreaker
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lawbreaking
. To sum up,
although
many factors lead to a surge
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criminality, a variety of potential methods can easily resolve .
Therefore
, given
this
situation ,both laws and parents are the
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in making a big change,
such
as educating students
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social benefits,
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division
of salary and stricter punishments.
Finally
,the
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level would decline gradually and
this
tend
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the country
more safe
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and
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.
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