Some people think that if a country is already rich, further economic development will not result in its citizens being any happier. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Some argue that
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economic development in already riched countries would not make their citizen happy.
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essay completely agrees with the statement as
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condition will increase the
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of working citizens and income inequality will be seen. An economically developed country means more
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to its residents.
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to say that the economy would demand more
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and long working hours from the
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time spent with families will be suffered leading to unhappiness.
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, China manufacturing companies have employees working 12 hours per shift six days a week.
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,
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do enjoy the lifestyle provided by the economically stable country, but increased work demand would lead to decreased happiness. Another reason why the economical richer countries cannot provide happiness is because of the fact that it creates a large income gap among companies. To be more clear, the senior management team gets higher pay with bonuses, but the ground-level employers get minimum or no increment in their wages.
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, Amazon's workers, who are working in factories are paid $15 per hour, whereas the net worth of their CEO increases after every few months.
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shows that the higher the position, the more paid salary. In conclusion, despite the economical stability would provide a better lifestyle to the
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, it will increase the
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of those around as well as the income gap, which will make the
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around unhappy.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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