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Some people think that the best way to improve road transport safety is to let the deiver test each year. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, traffic
accidents
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 are increasing at high speed all over the world.
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, it is the most important problem that many countries face.
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, whether all drivers need to have a driving
test
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 each year is a controversial issue. In my opinion, I deeply disagree with
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 idea. With the number of
cars
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 raising at high speed. More and more
accidents
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 are happening. There are three reasons for
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 situation.
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, the driver’s bad skill is the main reason. Due to the lack of practice with driving, lots of new drivers don’t know how to drive their
cars
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 safely and don’t know how to avoid
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.
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, when drivers notice that the other car who behind them and stopped suddenly, they didn’t adopt their speed or press the brake.
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, the bad habit of a pedestrian is another reason. Lots of
people
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 who walk on the street don’t worry about the
cars
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 coming. They cross the street whenever they want without watching traffic lights. The
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 reason is the situation of
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. Bad maintenance situations will cause
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.
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, everyone passed the
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 of driving before they get their driving license. The
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 of driving isn’t as same as driving in fact, especially for the mental.
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, when
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 are taking their
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 of driving, they are concentrating on the road and the order from the examiner, but when they are driving as normal, they would feel relaxed. So that they would have
accidents
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 easily. The best way to prevent
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 is for the government should increase the power of punishment to
people
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 who offend the law of traffic. Educating all
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 through social media is
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 a good method. In conclusion, I disagree that having a driving
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 every year. It is not a good way to avoid transport
accidents
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.
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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

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If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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