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One of the most pressing problems facing the world today is overpopulation. What policies do you think governments should adopt to address the causes and effects of this problem?

Overpopulation is one of the most pressing problems facing the world today. Some of the major
causes
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 include increased life expectancy and decreased mortality rate, owing to better healthcare. In
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 essay, I will discuss and analyze the
causes
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 and
effects
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 of
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 problem. The global population has grown exponentially over the
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 100 years. One of the main
causes
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 of
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 is better healthcare, improvements in the standards of living, improved affordability and increased life expectancy.
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, most
people
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 nowadays could expect to live for more years up to 85 to 90 years.
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, a significant proportion of these
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 live below the poverty line and in unsanitary conditions. Another cause would be that developing economies like India and China have been the major contributors to
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 huge demand for energy. The major
effects
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 of
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 problem include increasing energy demand, rising fuel costs, more consumption of electricity and an increasing number of
people
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 who struggle to provide a quality life for their families.
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,
people
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 in some of the developing communities lack quality education to understand the harmful
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 of overpopulation and there are many ailing patients to cater to in the hospitals. There are
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 improvements in the childbirth rate and a decrease in the mortality rate in these nations.
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 the government can provide adequate education through initiatives in every village and city through catchphrases to control the
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 mentioned above. The government could
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 spread and evenly distribute the population in various cities by suggesting companies run offices in remote locations.
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,
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 would greatly address the problem of densely populated towns and corners of the cities where some of the
people
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 would struggle for a living.
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, pharmaceutical companies could
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 market products which could greatly reduce the challenges of unplanned pregnancies. In conclusion, after having carefully addressed the
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 and
effects
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 of the problems of overpopulation, governments should take measures in bringing awareness to reduce the growth of the population and to improve the financial scenario in developing nations.

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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