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Dear Sir or Madam, My name is Vladislav Krotov and I am a graduate of the “Logistics” program at the School of Business of Belarusian State
University
. I am currently working as a logistics manager for the German company Xometry Europe GmbH. With
this
 motivation letter, I would like to express my interest and motivation for obtaining a master’s degree in Germany. Every person, at some stage in life, has a question: how to develop
further
? In my
second
 year at
university
, I realised that I am interested in big business processes
such
 as supply chain, procurement, and distribution. But at the same time, I realised that even though we had a wide range of subjects, my
university
 program was focused more on learning at a basic level. When I graduated from
university
, I decided that I would try to take my
first
 steps into a job in my field, but as expected, I was faced with a lack of practical knowledge.
However
, I decided to give myself more time to understand exactly what knowledge and skills I need. And now it is that moment when I can answer the question of how to develop
further
 and make a conscious choice of an appropriate master's program to continue studying at a deeper level. My goal is to become a top manager in an international company, preferably in the field of Integrated Logistics Services. One of my aspirations is to become a person who can take the organisation to the
next
 international level and develop a company in the domestic market that can compete with big global leaders.
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