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Band 8.5

(2024)You have recently changed your job and started working for a new company. Write a letter to an English-speaking friend. In your letter, explain why you have changed your previous job describe your new job tell him/her your other news

Dear John, I hope
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 letter finds you in excellent spirits. It has been quite some time since we
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 met, and I am excited to share some extraordinary news with you. Before I proceed, I would like to bring to your attention that I have recently parted ways with my previous employer. The primary reason for my resignation was the disparity between my compensation package and the value I brought to the organisation. Unfortunately, despite my exceptional skills and dedication, my salary was not commensurate with industry standards.
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, I was disappointed by the lack of equality among the male and female staff members, which created an unpleasant work environment. Now, I am thrilled to inform you that I have recently secured a position at Google, a company I have always aspired to work for. I was fortunate enough to pass the rigorous interview process, and I am now part of a talented team of professionals. My role involves designing software and conducting SWOT analyses for various projects, which aligns perfectly with my skills and interests. Notably, my new salary is significantly higher than my previous one, and I am eager to take on new challenges and responsibilities. I look forward to catching up with you soon and sharing more about my experiences. Please do not hesitate to respond, as I would love to hear about your life and any new developments. Missing you, Manpreet

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coherence and cohesion
Try to use simpler sentences in some parts to make it easier to read.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea to improve understanding.
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You could add a personal story or example about your new job to make it more engaging.
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Overall, keep your friendly tone throughout to maintain a personal touch.
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The letter has a warm and friendly greeting and closing, which suits the tone well.
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You clearly explained why you changed jobs and described your new position well.
coherence and cohesion
The structure is organized with clear paragraphs, making it easy to follow.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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