Some teachers tend to reward students who achieve high academic results, others, however, support and reward students that show the most improvement. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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whom teachers should appreciate is always a debatable topic
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like to provide
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for
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who has shown continuous progress. In my opinion
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to a logical conclusion. On
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after completing a lesson. If a
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must appreciate the
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appreciation.
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encouragement.
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revenge towards their peers. Teachers always keep in mind that
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each
child
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of each scholar and must provide appropriate inspiration to get their maximum effort.
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not only for academic progression but
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, a good coach always treats all the
children
similarly
well. All the
children
, those who have shown continuous growth are
also
equally eligible for getting rewarded
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  • Incentivize
  • Academic success
  • High achievers
  • Excellence
  • Competition
  • Strive
  • Recognition
  • Encouragement
  • Inclusive
  • Educational environment
  • Personal growth
  • Middle ground
  • Efforts
  • Neglect
  • Lower the bar
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