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the media is increasing interest in famous people who have ordinary backgrounds. why do you think people are interested in the live of famous people? do you think its a good thing?

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 has shed more light on the lifestyle of celebrities than ever before. Many
people
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 are interested in following them as they tend to copy them and they try to mimic their way of life. If you ask me,
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 is not a good thing. It affects
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 financially and hides their real personalities. Famous
people
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 tend to show off their luxurious possessions and items on social
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 directly or indirectly. They do
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 as a part of their job as advertisers for big corporations and companies. Some
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 will buy these goods
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 they probably don't need them just to copy someone who is famous and
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,
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 unnecessary expenditure will burden them financially. Another example of the negative impact
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 cast on society is on the psychological level. Teenagers and young adults are often affected by celebrities and try to mimic their personalities whenever possible.
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 blind copying, good or bad, will prevent those youngsters from developing their own personalities and opinions.
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, famous
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 can cast some positive effects on society. They can promote campaigns to support certain causes or help in fundraising for charities. As a part of the community, they usually do these activities and encourage their
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 to participate in them. Overall, the
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 has infiltrated our lives to a tremendous extent. The way it's utilised by celebrities can sometimes cause a bad influence.
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, it can be used for good and noble causes. The way
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 is used greatly depends on the person using it.
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