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People have a better quality of life than in past centuries. DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE

#people #quality #life #centuries
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 modern era,
definition
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 of the quality of
life
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been
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changed from the past. Previously, individuals were very close to their families, but they did not
had
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 many options in terms of
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luxury. Nowadays,
people
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 are experiencing luxurious
life
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,
modern
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and modern
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amenities
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 and living their
life
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fullest
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. While few individuals advocate that previous generations enjoyed their
life
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 most, others completely differ with
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 view. In my opinion, today's generations are having
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 quality of
life
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 than
people
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 from past centuries. In
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i
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my stands and will explain my view with examples.
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 with, In past,
people
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 did not have access to
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modern
amenities
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 like
car
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cars
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,
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electricity
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and electricty
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electricty
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electricity
,
therefore
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 they had to do extensive physical work to
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fulfil
fullfill
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fulfil
 their basic needs.
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, 100 years
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ago
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ego
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, an individual had to travel several miles to collect drinking water. At present,
people
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 do not even have to worry about these things, because
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almost
allmost
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parts
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 of the globe have
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provision
provisions
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provison
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provided
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safe drinking water, have access to transportation and electricity. These modern
amenities
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 have made
person's
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a person's
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life
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 much easier than before.
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, humans can use their time and brain for productive
works
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work
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with out
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 bothering about the basic things, which is more fruitful for both nation and individual.
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, due to the huge improvement in
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modern medicines and surgeries,
people
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 are easily combating
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lots of acute and chronic physical and mental illnesses, and their average living age is
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 increased than before, but in the past, the health care system did not have infrastructure like now and
people
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 often died due to lack of proper treatment.
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, In past, if a person had pneumonia, it was quite difficult for him to survive, but in recent days, pneumonia can be treated easily. Though, there are some exceptions. So,
people
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 in the modern era living their
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life
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 long and productive.
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,
people
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 now
has
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lot
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 more options in terms of entertainment than before.
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, television, radio, social media and so on. To conclude,
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although
althogh
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although
people
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past
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the past
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 had experienced organic foods , strong emotional
bond
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bonds
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 and
healthy
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a healthy
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lifestyle
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lifestyles
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, at
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present
preseset
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present
,
people
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 can experience all of them along with all modern
amenities
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. There is no doubt that
people
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 nowadays
enjoying
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 their
life
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fullest
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the fullest
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without
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with out
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without
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 worrying much.
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