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Nowadays, distance-learning programs have gained in popularity, but some people argue that online courses can never be taken as good as those taken at a college or university in person. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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These days, online learning systems have become more common. Some people think that
distance
 learning will never be as great as
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face
 learning in tertiary institutions. I agree with
this
 statement due to
cost - effectiveness
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 and
time saving
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time-saving
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for
distance
 learning.
Firstly
,
time - saving
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time-saving
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 is the main
benefits
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benefit
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 of electronic learning.
This
 is because teachers and
students
 can be connected
via
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online using Microsoft Teams and Zoom applications. Both
students
 and teachers do not need to travel to campus every day for
classes
 or lectures. They can just rely on a strong Internet connection and attend
classes
 every day.
For example
, a mother of two can attend online
classes
 on
weekend
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. She can still
goes
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 to work on
weekday
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.
Secondly
,
cost - effectiveness
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cost-effectiveness
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 is the
second
benefits
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benefit
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 of
distance
 learning. A
face
 to
face
 learning is much more expensive than online courses.
Also
,
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on-campus
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on campus
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education
 needs to have a limited number of
students
 in the class and campus facilities for
students
.
Thus
, all of these factors will be included in the tuition fees for physical
classes
.
For example
, an English course in British Council Malaysia costs around RM500 for
distance
 learning and RM1600 for physical
classes
. Both fees are charged for 3 weeks
lessons
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 only which
are
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is
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 a much big difference for
two
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the two
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 different modes of learning. In conclusion, cheaper tuition fees and
time saving
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time-saving
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 are two primary reasons
on
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why
e- learning
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e-learning
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education
 has become more common today. In my opinion, both modes of learning are the same as long as a student is interested and motivated to excel in
studies
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their studies
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. Any mode of learning would not be affected by the quality of
education
 delivered to
students
 in tertiary
education
.
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