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Writing Samples
Band 6

You have recently moved to a different city for work, but you want to maintain contact with a friend from your previous workplace. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, •Describe the city you moved to • Tell him/her about your new job • Invite him/her to visit you You do NOT need to write any addresses

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Dear Ekta I hope you are doing well. I am writing to you about my experience of moving to
Victoria
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 for work. As you already know, I was planning to move away from
Mainland
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the Mainland
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 for a
while
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 and
fortunately
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fortunately,
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 I got the job I applied for in
Victoria
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. The city is amazing and looks really beautiful both night and day. I go for
walk
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a walk
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 close to Parliament
house
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House
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 every night and sometimes
shopping
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shop
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 at
Victoria
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 downtown. During weekends, seeing the lighthouse near the beach is a must. The food options here are great and offer various cuisines. In terms of my new job, I am doing really well in my new role as a bank teller. The staff is supportive and friendly. I have been able to enhance my customer service with
this
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 new role. I work 5 days a week with weekends off. I would love it if you would visit me in
Victoria
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. We will create amazing memories and reminisce about our old times. Take care. Komal

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coherence and cohesion
While your letter is generally well-structured, make sure each paragraph addresses a single idea more distinctly to improve clarity.
task achievement
Provide a little more detail about the new job responsibilities or challenges to enhance your response.
suitable writing tone
The letter has a warm tone and feels friendly, which is great for maintaining connection with your friend.
complete response
You included details about the city and your job, which gives a good sense of your new life.
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