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Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In the recent few decades, free
health
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 service is the most conspicuous trend in today's world.
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 some people, free
health
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 care should be provided to all by every nation, even though the latest medical treatments are not affordable by the
health
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 service system
due to
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 exorbitant
cost
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. I firmly agree with
this
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 thought as basic
health
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 care should be available to every citizen of a
country
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 without any cost. First of all, it is unquestionable that the authority of each
country
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 ought to take care
about
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of
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 the well-being of residents.
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, medical expenditures of all citizens should be covered by the government, because not anyone can allow himself to buy high-priced peels or
to
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apply
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do a CT scan. To illustrate, in Kazakhstan all residents, who are above 18 and have a job transfer 3% of their income to medical insurance. It’s an obligation of every resident of the
country
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, but
this
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 percentage
do
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 not cover the service of
dentist
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a dentist
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, otolaryngologist or other types of specialists of a narrow profile. Apart from that, the welfare of the
country
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 straightly depends on
a
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the
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health
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 of its nation. So, from the side of the
authority
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,authority
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 free diagnostic services ought to be performed frequently
amid
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among
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 citizens. In
this
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 case, in order to eliminate the overburdening of
republic’s
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the republic’s
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 budget all well-to-do entrepreneurs of
state
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the state
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 should give a hand.
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,
last
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 year the national company called “Samruk Kazyna” launched a train “Salamatty Kazakhstan”, which conducted medical examinations among the villagers.
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, it is the duty of the government to provide free medical services to its people. If the inhabitants of the
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 are healthy and full of energy, the state will occupy leading positions in the ranking of the world.
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