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It is important for all towns and cities to have large public spaces such as squares and parks. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#towns #cities #spaces #squares #parks
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These days, public centres have an irrefutable role in most of the city.
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, small metropolises do not have any need for them, so I think large public sites are appropriate for big cities.
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 with, megacities usually have a great community with different types of personalities.
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, to satisfy all the citizens, the government should consider some large public zones for them.
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, society can spend their free time in these centres to do their interesting things.
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, in Tehran which is one of the megacities around the world, you can find a lot of huge public places,
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 as LALEH PARK where people of any type of age go there and have a good time with their family or friends.
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, huge public places for big metropolises are essential.
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, fewer individuals live in small cities, and investment in building large public sites does not reasonable.
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 spacious places for small metropolises does not important because of their population.
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, putting on some small recreational sites can save
money
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 because needs less
money
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 rather than a huge area, and investing
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 on other vital things that people need to them,
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 as building hospitals or schools.
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, in Divandareh (which is a nice small city in the western part of Iran) you cannot find any large public zones because
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 has a little population, but has a developed hospital which leads to all people in
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 have a good level of health.
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, enormous public areas in small municipalities are a waste of
money
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, energy, and time. In conclusion, enormous public areas are not only necessary for big cities but
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 are vital because of their huge population.
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, in small municipalities, just a small public field could be enough and
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 of building large public zones, the government can invest
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 in other things like the health of the citizens.
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