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The following picture describes differences in work of the conventional power generation system and the natural gas-fired cogeneration system.

#picture #differences #work #power #generation #system #cogeneration
Firstly
,
systems
varies
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 in the place, where actually
power
 is generated. In
conventional
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a conventional
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system
,
generation
 is provided at the beginning of the supply chain, which is started at the
power
 plant. After
generation
 is conducted, the
power
 is delivered to the consumers through the transmission cables. In
cogeneration
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the cogeneration
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system
 liquid natural gas (LNG)
firstly
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 delivered from the terminal to the gas engine through the pipeline, and only
than
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 the
generation
 process occurs.
Second
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distinguish
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 refers to the output products of two
systems
.
Conventional
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system
 provides
an
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electricity, while
cogeneration
systems
dispenses
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 electrical and thermal
energy
. Thermal
energy
 is
predominant
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a predominant
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 product with 30 – 60
percent
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per cent
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 of output
in contrast
 with 20 – 45
percent
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per cent
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 for electrical
energy
. The
last
 difference is the amount of wasted
energy
. Conventional
system
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systems
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prone
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are prone
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 to
more
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a more
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 sufficient amount of losses – 56
percent
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per cent
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 during the
generation
 phase at the plant and 4
percent
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per cent
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 for the delivery.
Instead
, for
cogeneration
systems’overall
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systems overall
 losses represents 10 – 30
percent
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per cent
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 and they
takes
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 place at the phase of
generation
.
For
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recap
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 I would like to highlight, that the most sufficient
distinguish
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distinction
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 between
two
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the two
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systems
 from the
customers
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customer's
customers'
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 point of view could be the output products, and the
cogeneration
systems
provides
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provide
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 both – electrical and thermal
power
. Lower wastes of
energy
 for
this
system
 could
also
 reduce the price for
customer
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customers
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.
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