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The number of people suffering from health problems caused by a modern lifestyle which cannot be treated with modern medicines. Some people believe that alternative medicine can help.Do you agree that alternative medicines are effective?

#people #health #lifestyle #medicines #alternative #medicine
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In contemporary society, people may be suffering from health diseases due to their current lifestyles which could not control with modern
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 medicals can be best for those health diseases.
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 people have different opinions I thoroughly agree with
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 statement because
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medicine
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 may be given massive advantages for health problems. In Asian humans thoroughly mingle with
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medicine
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 more than modern
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 as yoga, and Ayurveda. Those medicines are healthy for any age group.
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, if someone suffering long-time back pain,
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medicine
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 is the best solution for it. Because it may clearly give comfortable in the right zone in the body. But when it comes to modern
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 it will give short-term feel-good. It is clearly said that no one has found the right modern
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 for cancer. But yoga will be given mental as well as physical relief.
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 modern
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 gives short-term relief it does not given a healthy effect on the body. It is clear that some people have been dead due to modern medical treatment but no records of
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. So, a comparison of modern
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 and
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medicine
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 has been given thousands of pros more than modern
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