Nowadays young people mostly learn by reading books or watching movies and TV shows ,rather than personal experience. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Nowadays many parents tend to teach their children by reading books and watching movies, rather than real-life
experiences
. I have both sides of
this
viewpoint. Learning
by
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real-life
experiences
is a good
way
which
lead
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to many benefits I will mention in
this
essay. On the one hand, youngster today do not
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solve their problem immediately, when they face
problem
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, they often ask their parents or friends for help and can not do it by themselves.
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is a result
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studying at school.
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number of teachers still teach their students in a traditional
way
. Students
just
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have attention on
knowledge
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what they learn from school.
For example
, if
youngster
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have
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a problem, they just know one
way
to solve it. It may be right in
this
situation but in some
cases
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this
solution does not suitable
In addition
, young people build their confidence and
independent
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thanks to real-life
experiences
to deal with any problems. It creates their own thinking, own
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opinions
opinitions
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opinions
though
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many different situations in social
On the other hand
, they can
also
learn by reading books or watching movies. They can see some situations which appear in some movies originate from daily life. They can learn and imitate
this
solution and use it in their own case. But they need to choose the best
way
and suitable with their solution. In conclusion, there are many ways for parents to educate children. But real-life
experiences
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pretty good for many generations later.
This
take
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young people today close to
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communication and
also
society.
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