Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to young children) To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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high
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education. In my point of view, I totally agree with the thesis since it is essential to apply the
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to helping others.
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support from the young generation.
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type of help it would be. On one hand, if educators helped the destitute persons somehow,
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social inequality would be balanced slightly.
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the other hand, it would possibly play
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, primary or secondary
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educators will follow how the high
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disciples are helping poor
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or teaching other students in
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they are confident.
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communication is a key to many problems and takes a crucial role in
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participation in
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would give an important lesson to a student.
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, students will be studying to communicate through leadership,
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through
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teaching.
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is a professional basketball coach. So, the future coach goes
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in the university he
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at to a
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where he had been studying before for a while.
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primary
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students would have a huge impact
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both sides. To conclude,
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others and help
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the
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who will be grateful for it could build correct habits
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to the character of the nation.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • compulsory
  • high school programmes
  • unpaid community service
  • charity
  • improving the neighbourhood
  • teaching sports
  • sense of responsibility
  • empathy
  • broader perspective
  • societal issues
  • college applications
  • job applications
  • positive impact
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