Some people feel that equality between the genders have already been achieved what others think there is considerable progress to be made discuss both views and give your opinion
While some people believe males and
females
are equal in all aspects of human living, others think they are still lots of areas Change preposition
in their
their
equality Correct pronoun usage
which
have
not been achieved. In my opinion, I believe there are still many areas Correct subject-verb agreement
has
Change preposition
in that
that
Correct word choice
where
men
and women
are not the same which include absence
of many Add an article
the absence
an absence
females
in leadership positions
and the patriarchal nature of the family.
On the one hand, some people think men
and women
have become equal in all areas of life because of the access to education both sexes now have. In other words
, before now, folks of the female gender did not have the opportunity to attend school as their male counterparts. This
set women
behind for a lot of years, but nowadays, women
can now access the same education men
have. For example
, my grandmother could not read and write because she said women
were not allowed in schools and were relegated to domestic chores, but these days everyone can read and write because we are all allowed to go to school.
On the other hand
and in my opinion, I believe men
and women
have not achieved equality because some positions
are still exclusively held by men
. By this
I mean, for many leadership positions
in society they still have more men
with very little
Correct quantifier usage
few
spaces
for Fix the agreement mistake
space
women
. For instance
, many of the presidents of the Nations of the world are men
, with the percentage of females
less than 2%. Furthermore
, the patriarchal structure of the family still reveals to us that men
and women
are not equal as most decisions around the children and home are still subject to the authority of the father.
In conclusion, while some individuals consider the equality of men
and females
have
been attained in all facets of our society, I still believe Correct subject-verb agreement
has
this
is untrue because some positions
and decisions are still delineated to a particular gender.Submitted by beansola on
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite
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