Some people feel that equality between the genders have already been achieved what others think there is considerable progress to be made discuss both views and give your opinion
While some people believe males and
females
are equal in all aspects of human living, others think they are still lots of areas Use synonyms
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in their
their
equality Correct pronoun usage
which
have
not been achieved. In my opinion, I believe there are still many areas Correct subject-verb agreement
has
Change preposition
in that
that
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where
men
and Use synonyms
women
are not the same which include Use synonyms
absence
of many Add an article
the absence
an absence
females
in leadership Use synonyms
positions
and the patriarchal nature of the family.
On the one hand, some people think Use synonyms
men
and Use synonyms
women
have become equal in all areas of life because of the access to education both sexes now have. Use synonyms
In other words
, before now, folks of the female gender did not have the opportunity to attend school as their male counterparts. Linking Words
This
set Linking Words
women
behind for a lot of years, but nowadays, Use synonyms
women
can now access the same education Use synonyms
men
have. Use synonyms
For example
, my grandmother could not read and write because she said Linking Words
women
were not allowed in schools and were relegated to domestic chores, but these days everyone can read and write because we are all allowed to go to school.
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On the other hand
and in my opinion, I believe Linking Words
men
and Use synonyms
women
have not achieved equality because some Use synonyms
positions
are still exclusively held by Use synonyms
men
. By Use synonyms
this
I mean, for many leadership Linking Words
positions
in society they still have more Use synonyms
men
with very Use synonyms
little
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few
spaces
for Fix the agreement mistake
space
women
. Use synonyms
For instance
, many of the presidents of the Nations of the world are Linking Words
men
, with the percentage of Use synonyms
females
less than 2%. Use synonyms
Furthermore
, the patriarchal structure of the family still reveals to us that Linking Words
men
and Use synonyms
women
are not equal as most decisions around the children and home are still subject to the authority of the father.
In conclusion, while some individuals consider the equality of Use synonyms
men
and Use synonyms
females
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have
been attained in all facets of our society, I still believe Correct subject-verb agreement
has
this
is untrue because some Linking Words
positions
and decisions are still delineated to a particular gender.Use synonyms
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite