Some people feel that equality between the genders have already been achieved what others think there is considerable progress to be made discuss both views and give your opinion

While some people believe males and
females
are equal in all aspects of human living, others think they are still lots of areas
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equality
have
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not been achieved. In my opinion, I believe there are still many areas
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that
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where
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men
and
women
are not the same which include
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the absence
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of many
females
in leadership
positions
and the patriarchal nature of the family. On the one hand, some people think
men
and
women
have become equal in all areas of life because of the access to education both sexes now have.
In other words
, before now, folks of the female gender did not have the opportunity to attend school as their male counterparts.
This
set
women
behind for a lot of years, but nowadays,
women
can now access the same education
men
have.
For example
, my grandmother could not read and write because she said
women
were not allowed in schools and were relegated to domestic chores, but these days everyone can read and write because we are all allowed to go to school.
On the other hand
and in my opinion, I believe
men
and
women
have not achieved equality because some
positions
are still exclusively held by
men
. By
this
I mean, for many leadership
positions
in society they still have more
men
with very
little
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for
women
.
For instance
, many of the presidents of the Nations of the world are
men
, with the percentage of
females
less than 2%.
Furthermore
, the patriarchal structure of the family still reveals to us that
men
and
women
are not equal as most decisions around the children and home are still subject to the authority of the father. In conclusion, while some individuals consider the equality of
men
and
females
have
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been attained in all facets of our society, I still believe
this
is untrue because some
positions
and decisions are still delineated to a particular gender.
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