Some people believe that children have the freedom to make mistakes, while others argue that adults should prevent them from doing so. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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integral part of human life. Even,
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of
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, the
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of making
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always been a question of debate. Some believe that
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kids
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their own
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things,
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think
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should have control over them.
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with, like others
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also
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mistakes
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own and
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they won’t repeat them
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next
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time.
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, if a boy
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a cup wrongly, may
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to
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blockage
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, the boy understands how to avoid
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we can point out several from our routine life.
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, some believe that each activity of
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should be monitored by old people to make them error
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human
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kids
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wrong Food habits and food hygiene. If the elder one is not monitoring and controlling enough,
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may end up in
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unhealthy
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. In my opinion,
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to be free on doing wrong things. In conclusion, irrespective of the
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view on
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freedom
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of doing wrong, they over weighed due to the intellectual capability
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kids
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first
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look one feels the intervention
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of elder
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in
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long-term impact is not correct. So, let
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • freedom to make mistakes
  • critical thinking skills
  • lifelong learning
  • guided learning environment
  • resilience
  • independence
  • overprotective
  • dependency
  • problem-solving skills
  • confidence
  • negative consequences
  • learning process
  • personal growth
  • trial and error
  • balance safety and learning
  • development
  • support and guidance
  • empowerment
  • risk-taking
  • life lessons
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