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Some people believe that children have the freedom to make mistakes, while others argue that adults should prevent them from doing so. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Mistakes
 are
the
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 integral part of human life. Even,
practice
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the practice
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 of
mistakes
 is most common among
kids
.
However
, the
freedom
 of making
mistakes
 among
children
have
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 always been a question of debate. Some believe that
,
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apply
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kids
having
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have
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 their own
freedom
 to do
the
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things,
others
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while others
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 think
elder
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elders
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 should have control over them.
The
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In the
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 upcoming paragraph, I shall discuss both of these views precisely to obtain a path forward
to
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this
 subject.
To begin
 with, like others
children
also
 should have the
freedom
 to do
the
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apply
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mistakes
.
This
 helps them to find their faults
their
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on their
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 own and
therefore
 they won’t repeat them
in
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apply
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next
 time.
For example
, if a boy
holding
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holds
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 a cup wrongly, may
leads
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lead
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 to
brockage
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blockage
 of the same. From
such
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the such
a such
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incident
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an incident
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, the boy understands how to avoid
such
situation
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a situation
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.
This
 is one small example,
similarly
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,similarly
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 we can point out several from our routine life.
On the other hand
, some believe that each activity of
children
 should be monitored by old people to make them error
fee
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free
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 human
being
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beings
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.
For instance
, most
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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kids
follows
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follow
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 wrong Food habits and food hygiene. If the elder one is not monitoring and controlling enough,
kids
 may end up in
an
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apply
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unhealthy
condition
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conditions
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. In my opinion,
children
 to be free on doing wrong things. In conclusion, irrespective of the
disadvantages
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 view on
kids
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kids'
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freedom
 of doing wrong, they over weighed due to the intellectual capability
gaining
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gained
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of
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by
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kids
 during
this
 process.
In
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first
 look one feels the intervention
elder
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of elder
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 in
children
’s activities is important,
however
 in
a
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the
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 long-term impact is not correct. So, let
kids
 fly
their
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on their
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 own.
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