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Is the ability to read and write more important today than in the past? Why or why not? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

#ability #support
How many books have you read recently? Many young and adult
people
 haven't read a book
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 even months. But, what is the reason why reading and writing became
such
 a worthless activity for
people
?
Firstly
, technology has changed the entire world for good and bad reasons, because of
it
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 social media has
became
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 the most important thing for
people
, leaving behind real activities like
sport
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, art and including
lecture
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. Social media had changed the attention spot for something shorter and shorter with the
pass
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 of the years,
for
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 TikTok
that
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 in only with 15 seconds made you watch a video with interesting content. It might be dynamic and original at some point, but it affected
lecture
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the lecture
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 in a bad way. Reading a book entirely in a healthy way
sleeping
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and sleeping
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 well takes 3 days
nornally
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normally
; imagine the change that there is to
reading
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 a book for 3 days at 15 seconds of attention, comment and leaving for other
video
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videos
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 and continuing the eternal circle of social media. For
writers
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 it was a huge glow down. Even though, reading is so much easier now for the same technology ironically, because nowadays it became more popular
reading
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to read
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 books and shorter stories on apps, pages,
groups
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and groups
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 of
people
of
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another countries
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another country
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; even writing is easier for
this apps
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, sharing your own stories and it arriving at some much
people
 on the internet.
However
, reading isn't a so interesting activity for
people
 and despite
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the
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 popularity of it, not
much
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many
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people
 read, even
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if it's
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 healthy and it helps
people
on
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with
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 their vocabulary, learning, getting more knowledge and more.
Finally
, in my
opinion
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 writing and reading
was
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 never so important for
people
, but
it
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they
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 should be. It can be fun though, it's not necessary to learn something about it, but it always improves your grammar skills and more.
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