Some people think that in the modern world we are more dependent on each other, while others think that people have become more independent. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
However
, in the modern era, some people
believe that dependency between people
has increased, whereas others
believe that people
have grown to be more independent.
One reason that people
think we are more dependent on each other is because of our reliance on others
to provide a positive image of ourselves. People
are bombarded these days with pictures of beautiful models and people
who seem to have perfect lives
. Many people
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, therefore,
therefore
feel the need to go on social media, such
as Facebook and Instagram, in order to post pictures and they need others
to get as many ‘likes’ as possible. In addition
to this
, because of the hectic and busy lives
some families lead, it is argued they are dependent on others
to support them, such
as with
grandparents helping to take care of their grandchildren because the parents don't have time.
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However
, despite this
, overall I believe that people
are generally more independent. This
can be seen in the way that so many people
live away from their families and lead their own lives
. For example
, families used to live nearby to each other, but nowadays people
often reside in different cities to
their parents and siblings or in other countries, seeing each other only rarely in some cases. Not only Change preposition
from
this
, people
prefer more privacy than in the past and do not require help from others
, seen in the way that neighbours these days often do not know each other or interact at all.
In conclusion, although
in certain ways people
are more dependent, it is generally the case that people
now live more independent lives
. Only over time will it be revealed as to
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this
is a positive or negative development for society.Submitted by joelj385 on
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