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Nowadays many countries have very cosmopolitan cities with people from all over the world. How can the government ensure that all these people can live together harmoniously? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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People
 are travelling all over the world to get better job opportunities and education , which sometimes they are not able to get in their home
country
. So now many cities are becoming multicultural with
people
 from all over. It is really important that they should live together and respect each other , for
this
government
 can take many actions which will be discussed in
further
 paragraphs with suitable examples. To commence with ,
firstly
government
 should make a law to handle racism ,
for instance
 , nowadays it is very common that
people
 from different countries are bullied by local countrymen which can demotivate the person who is spending his or her talent on the improvement of
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country
 ,
moreover
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 he is
also
 helping in the growth of the economy.
Additionally
 , the
government
 can provide them with the liberty to celebrate their festivals and sometimes politicians can
also
 join them to show respect for their culture ,
For example
 ,Toronto is considered a cosmopolitan city , where
people
 from different countries can celebrate their festivals freely and live with harmony with other
people
 . To explain more supporting points , It is true that sometimes a host
country
 can have conflicts with another
country
 , but they should not do partiality on the basis of certain political issues with the public who are already living and serving them ,else it will definitely create chaos and anxiety between
people
 .
Moreover
 , it will make an unpleasant environment for the local community as well.
This
 can be seen from the recent incident of the Ukraine war where folks are still struggling to live peacefully. To conclude, It is really important for any
country
 that their countrymen will live peacefully for
this
government
 can make laws to stop racism and should not do partiality on the basis of political issues with another
country
 so that all these
people
 can live together harmoniously.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cosmopolitan
  • inclusive policies
  • cultural exchange
  • integration
  • community centers
  • anti-discrimination
  • awareness campaigns
  • support systems
  • diversity
  • equal opportunities
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