should not force children to learn a foreign language To what extent do you agree with the statement

nowadays ,
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learn a foreign
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increasing . Some
parents
force their
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language
while others direct based on their interests . in
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about that it . Some
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what
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the more
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effective
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effective
for their
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parents
show the way for
children
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another things
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. If they study
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acquire
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language
it has lots of benefits.
for
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knowing another
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can contribute to
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broadening
their outlook on life.If they enjoy
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studying their subjects it gives more
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effective
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. They can cope with
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different cultures and enjoy a better position to read more books written in.
Parents
support that's why
children
do not afraid of making mistakes Many
children
are not able to learn
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language
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.
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it
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more time and money. If
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children
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on the
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. in conclusion I would agree that
parents
should encourage but not compel , to learn a new
language
. I believe not only important but necessary
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