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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#country #language
We are living in a world
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study
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 abroad is
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 more and more prevalent.
However
, there
has
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 many controversial arguments surrounding
that
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living in a foreign country where we can not speak our mother
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tongue
tounge
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tongue
. While some people said it may
brings
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 out some social
issue
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issues
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such
 as practical problems. On the one hand. Studying abroad or being a denizen could make us face with
language
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the language
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 barrier. It is hard to communicate when we move to
new
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a new
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 place. Especially
foreign
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in foreign
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country
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countries
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, multilingual communication could lead us to
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a misunderstanding
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misunderstanding
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about
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study
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the study
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 and daily life.
On the other hand
.
As a result
 of
language
 conflict, we may suffer the scene of isolation and
inferority
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inferiority
 when contacting
with
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people. The
language
 barrier might make it difficult for us to engage in activities as a way to fitting back
society
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into society
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. Not only the difference in
language
 but
also
 in culture. Living in
the
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 multicultural
neighborhood
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neighbourhood
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also
 lead to
serious
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a serious
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 problem.
For example
,
the
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discrimination
descrimination
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discrimination
 on the ground of race and culture
are
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 inevitable. Overall, I strongly agree with the opinion that living in a country where we have to speak another
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tongue
tounge
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tongue
 could be
reason
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the reason
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 for some social and practical problems.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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