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Some people believe that the problem of illegal drugs can be solved by just legalizing all drugs. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this?

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Nowadays it is often considered the best way to control the usage of
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illegal substances by making
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 legal. In
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 regard, the government can play a vital role. In my opinion, I totally disagree with
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 approach.
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, in the following, paragraphs I will elaborate on my point of view.
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 with, in recent days a large number of the young population is addicted to drugs,
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, even they don't hesitate to smuggle them through the borders.
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, in many parts of the
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 world some types of medicine like sleeping pills, anti-depressants and antibiotics can’t sell without a prescription because the right dosage is crucial.
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, without taking it in specified quantity it can lead to death.
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, can bring many other consequences which will put pressure on the health care system of any country and unwanted expenses as well.
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, it will be very difficult to control crimes and drug addiction in society which in turn will spoil the youth of any nation.
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, some drugs have a medical use,
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, Marijuana or Ephedrine as FDA
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 their usefulness in heart diseases, epilepsy or improved concentration but it is the obligation of policymakers to regulate the quota system; only allowing the specified quantity according to the need of pharmaceutical companies.
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, by legalizing it will be impossible to keep the check. In a recent survey done in Australia, it was found that 80 per cent of illegal drugs are taken by
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youth of age 15-28 while only 20 per cent of other ages are involved. In conclusion, I would say legalizing illicit products will only cause harm to
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society and youth the most.
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