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Nowadays children are being encouraged to use computers and digital media to enhance their learning. Discuss the Advantages and disadvantages of this concept

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The advent of technology has enabled new methods of learning and teaching ,especially for school-going children. It enabled some advanced and useful systems of teaching so that
students
 can learn quickly . Especially digital
media
 tools used by teachers have really turnaround how children should be taught. ,
However
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 there are some advantages and disadvantages of using digital
media
 and
computers
 in teaching . Lets us discuss both views before I draw my conclusion .
Computers
 and digital
media
 have replaced the blackboard kind of teaching in schools .Nowadays most
students
 learn through
computers
 and digital
media
 . Computer and digital
media
 have been used to teach various subjects like science , geography , maths and languages like English , french etc. The biggest advantage of using
computers
 is that
students
 can see and feel the subject by using real-life audio and video visuals. pupils can really feel how the rainy season arrived by using videos . On the other ,hand we have taught through
computers
 which makes pupils dependent on them . They develop the habit of spending their leisure on PCs and laptops. Which results in minimal physical activity and they became unfit from a health point of view. Most of the pupils
also
 develop habits of playing games on a computer .Which hampers the overall development of children. To sum up , using of
computers
 and digital
media
 for teaching should be properly monitored .
Students
 should be mentored in
such
 a way that can understand what is good and what is bad for their mental and physical growth.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • digital literacy
  • multimedia content
  • flexible and comprehensive education
  • interactive learning
  • knowledge retention
  • over-reliance
  • traditional learning skills
  • screen time
  • health impacts
  • cybersecurity risks
  • digital divide
  • inappropriate content
  • supervised learning
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