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In many countries, an increasing number of people live in cities instead of living in villages.

#countries #people #cities #villages
In a
lot
 of countries, a rose number of
people
 live in
cities
 than
of
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living in suburbs.
In
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this
 essay, will explore the
advantages
 and
disadvantages
 of
people
 who live in
cities
 more than those living in
the
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villages. There are two main
advantages
 of
live
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living
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 in
cities
.
First
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advantages
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advantage
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 is the
people
 who live in the
cities
they
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can get all services they need it. for
instant
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, health care, universities, schools, and shops. The
second
advantages
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advantage
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 is they can start
there
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their
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 own business in the
cities
 and they will be
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successful
sucsessfull
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successful
. Because in the
cities
 they have a
lot
 of
people
 and they can benefit them. Those were
advantages
 of
people
live
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living
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 in the
cities
. There are many
disadvantages
 of
live
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living
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 in
cities
.
Firstly
, the
cities
is
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are
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 very crowded and dirty, because
it
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they
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 have a
lot
 of
people
 from many where .
Also
, it
have
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 a
lot
 of foreigners.
Secondly
, some
of
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cities
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the cities
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 are
dangurase
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language
dangers
. Because they have a
lot
 of gangs and thieves. Those were the
disadvantages
 of
people
live
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living
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 in
cities
. In
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conclusion
conclution
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conclusion
,
this
 essay
exmined
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examines
examined
 the two
advantages
 and two
disadvantages
 of
live
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living
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 in
cities
. in my opinion, I believe that the
live
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life
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 in
cities
 is better than
lives
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living
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 in the villages. Because they can get all services and jobs, we need
it
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them
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 in the
cities
.
however
, we can’t have
this
 thing in the villages.
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