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Some people believe that universities should only accept students with high marks. Others believe that universities must accept student of all ages regardless their previous grades. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #universities #students #marks #student #ages #grades
Few
individuals
 argue that
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tertiary
territory
teritory
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territory
education
need
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 to be given
for
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to
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 the ones who have top scores while others opine that college
have
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 to consider all the people applying for the studies no matter their ages or even their past grades.
Although
,
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 these perspectives are different I support the former
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statement
satement
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statement
 which I will depict in the following essays along with my opinion in the
last
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To begin
 with, once the criteria for getting sceat in the university is
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raised
rised
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raised
up
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according to the marks it can pave
way
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the way
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 towards
quality
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the quality
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 of
education
. Because only the ones who are interested in studying will be present in the college
hence
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wont
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won't
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 be
concern
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similarly
, it can even help the companies to choose the
individuals
 for jobs once they are graduated because these
students
 already went through a difficult
hurddle
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hurdle
 which is admission process.
For example
,
for
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getting a
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seat
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sceat
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seat
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 in any of the
IIT's
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 in India needs top grades
however
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, once the person
clear
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clears
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of
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 marks he
who
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apply
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can
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easily
easly
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easily
 get hired by fortune 500 yet big 4 companies in the
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global
globe
globle
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globe
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a
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 amazing
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package
pacakage
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package
. Since
,
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 the
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benchmark
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bench mark
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benchmark
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 is higher
students
 will get into
the
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a
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competitive
competative
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competitive
 mindset which helps to increase the standard of
education
.
On the other hand
,
by
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admitting the
scholers
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scholars
 without any criteria in the universities may help
individuals
 who really wanted to learn
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,
this
 may
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adversely
adversly
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adversely
affects
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majority
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the majority
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 of the crowd who struggled hard to get good grades.
Eventually
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 people might
loose
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lose
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interest
interested
intereste
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interest
for
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in
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 learning which can cause serious illiteracy
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among
amoung
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among
 the citizens. For an instance, when the world witnessed covid in the year 2020, CBSC schools in India
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declared
decleared
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declared
all
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students
 who were in 10 and 12
grade
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grades
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 does not have any exams and are promoted
this
 later became a controversy among
students
 and even affected
individuals
adversly
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adversely
.
Hence
 it is necessary to have
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certain
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ceratin
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guidliness
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guidelines
 to get into
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tertiary
teritary
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tertiary
education
. To sum up, I believe that stand of
education
 is important. But how can it be analysed?
through
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setting
cut off
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 marks for entering college is necessary
hence
 it can develop
competation
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competition
 in
students
 which gradually helps in rising the standard of
the
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education
.
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