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Many people like eating unhealthy food even though they know it's bad for them. Why is this the case? What effective ways can be taken to improve people's healthy eating habits?

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In the modern world, there is an increasing number of
people
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 who consume unhealthy foodstuff on a frequent base, even though they are well aware that it’s harmful to them.
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 phenomenon is particularly common among the younger generations, and affect them the most as their body is still developing. The main reason, I believe, is due to convenience. Nowadays many
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 have a high level of stress in their work, which leads to a tendency of pursuing simplicity. For them, time values the most. Healthy
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 in general, requires a lot of effort to prepare, whereas processed
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, can be bought everywhere with ease at a reasonable price. The
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 cause is because of their taste. In order to attract more customers, fast
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 producers tried their best to make the
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 delicious, which makes them irresistible to many
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, especially kids, whose self-discipline is not as good as adults. Certain measures must be taken to change public eating habits.
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, the government should restrict the number of advertisements for unhealthy
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, while increasing that of healthy ones.
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 could reduce the amount of fast
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 consumption driven by the stimulation of the advertisements, as well as increase public awareness of healthy
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 and gradually change their original eating habits.
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, advertisements aimed at children should even be banned completely.
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, the government could
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 provide free healthy
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 in schools and set up classes to teach children knowledge about health. In general, it is hard for
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 to change their eating habits on their own, so government and schools need to lend a helping hand in order to improve the situation.
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