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The manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. ting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

#process #sugar #cane #features #comparisons
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illustrate
illustarte
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illustrate
 the steps involved in making
sugar
 from
sugar
 cane and how to make
this
 valuable product. There are seven stages in the diagram, from growing
canes
in
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 the farm
,
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 to
final
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 phase of drying and cooling.
To begin
 with, the
sugar
canes
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cane
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 are raised
in
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 the farm between 12 to 18 months, the
next
 step
,
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 is harvesting which
canes
 are harvested with two methods. One of them is manually by workers which
is
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 more
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traditional
traditionl
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traditional
 and automatically one which is more modernized
that is
 included
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combine's
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 machines. After that, despite automatic harvesting or
manual
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a manual
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 one, the
canes
 are crushed to make the juice of it.
At
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 the
fourth-step
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fourth step
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, the
liquied
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liquid
 needs to purify by the Limestone filter.
Next
, the
canes'
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cane's
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 juice is heated on a stove
that
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called the Evaporator in order to make the syrup. Following
steps
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, the syrup is put in the centrifuge devices which
the
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separates
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separate
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sugar
 crystals from the syrup.
Finally
, the drying and cooling
step
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steps
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. make the real
sugar
 product that we know it.
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