Many people believe that media coverage of celebrities is having a negetive effect on children. To what extent do you agree?

It argued that television and social coverage of popular persons is
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adverse
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on offspring. I completely agree with the statement, because adolescents follow TV channels which
make
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them spend less time on their academics and trying impersonate them with their actions and style.
this
essay will be discussed more in detail in the following paragraphs. It is undeniable that children tend to watch more TV programs and follow various modes of media
such
as Twitter , Instagram, and Facebook,
Consequently
they are less concentrated on their
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as a result
of poor academic performance ,
this
effect not only the individual but
also
the society with less literacy rate . For ,example In a survey conducted in UK schools, those children who have fewer grades have found that they are watching their
favourite
stars' shows more than the allowed time.
Thus
I strongly agree that cebertarties are influencing the student's results.
Additionally
, some adolescents found imitating their
favourite
actor's styles
such
as hairstyles or make-up and eye colours , which makes them spend more money to attain
such
an appearance, which leads them to a lack
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financial freedom. in order to meet expenses they commit robbery to fulfil their wish,
furthermore
there some adolescence consume liquor since it is been advertised by their
favourite
actor . For ,example ,
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there is one person in the process of impersonating his
favourite
actor's eye colour he lost sight in cosmetic surgery.
Hence
imitating a Popular person can lead to financial instability and adverse health complications. To conclude, I strongly believe that due wide range of coverage of popular people there
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detrimental effects on the younger generation.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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