You recently stayed at a hotel and left a valuable item in your room. You have tried calling the hotel, but you have not received a helpful response.Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter:Explain the details of your stay and what item you left behind.Describe what happened when you tried to contact the hotel by phone.State what action you want the manager to take.

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Dear Mr Ray, I am writing
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letter to inform you, because I had a little problem when I checked out of your hotel yesterday. I have been contacting your crew before, but I have not received a helpful response.
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, I stayed at your hotel on Wednesday, 22nd , until Friday, 24th. I forgot my smartphone. The
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time I remembered, I had put the smartphone on the bed. I want you to understand it is very important to me because I have all my work data in my phone.
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, I have been contacting the receptionist, but they haven't found it in the room, and I keep asking for help to find it by tracing it ,
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my memories. Sometimes they ignore me by not giving me a response
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. I really feel uncomfortable right now because of that. I hope you can help me by investigating it by monitoring the CCTV camera in that days and asking all the crew who have been entering or cleaning up my room after the
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time I checked out of your hotel room. I really appreciate it when you give me a response at your convenience. Thankyou. Yours faithfully, Rizky Bachtiar.

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Task response: You answered all parts, but add more clear detail about the phone, like its brand, color, or room number.
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Task response: Use a more polite and direct ask at the end, such as asking the manager to check lost property and call you soon.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your ideas are in a good order, but some lines are too long. Make shorter sentences.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Use simple linking words like first, then, also, and finally.
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Task response: You covered the stay dates, the lost item, the phone call problem, and the action you want.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The letter has a clear opening, body, and ending.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

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