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Teenagers should have regular exams at secondary schools as this will prepare them better for life after leaving school. To what extend do you agree or disagree ?

#teenagers #exams #schools #life #school
Secondary schools need to have
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exams
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time
 to arrange them to
face
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challenges
challanges
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challenges
 without any hesitation.I would argue adolescents need to be examined
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regularly
regulary
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regularly
 in order to
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their
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 future . From the very
beginning
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 primary schools
as well as universities
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 schedule their
exams
like
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 mid and
year end
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 .
Therefore
 most of the students have their own
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experience
experiences
experince
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experience
about
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exams
.
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exams
exams
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regulary
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regularly
 their brains and minds getting active than the others.Because pupils have to do their studies day by day to
face
 their
exams
 and to reach their target score .The teenagers who
doing
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 their
exams
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time
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time
are know
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about
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how to target their achievements accurately.
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,students are well practised to focus
life
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 goals.
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, the article which was published in
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the sunday
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sunday
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based
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 on some information got from
the
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society the most of the people who achieved their life targets.
On the other hand
 ,the students
are
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who
face
 their
exams
 always they
wll
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will
well
all
practiced
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 to work and
study
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under
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 stressful
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environment
environments
enviorenment
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environments
.Because pupils have to
face
 their
exam
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exams
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 from
time
 to
time
 irrespective
for
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 their likes and dislikes to reach
target
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the target
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score
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scores
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 in the
exams
.
For
instance
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 the research held by
University
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the University
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 of Colombo 80% of
proportion
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 who worked
under
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pressure
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 environment were
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were
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never had
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the experience
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experience
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 of
face
 to
exam
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exams
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 they were under
low
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a low
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 level of education. If they had
learn
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and
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knowledge about how they can manage the situation properly they will
face
 their problem in a nice way. Taking everything into consideration
Pupil
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 must have
a
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 exam at least once a year
it
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 helps them to keep their knowledge in mind as well as to focus on their life goals.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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