Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case ? Do you think is a positive or negative development?

There is an increasing trend among youngsters that
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their mobile devices for several hours in an intensive way. Because of the advanced technology, there are many matters
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be done on mobile phones. Some people and I are of the belief that phenomenon is an alarming indicator of threat which endangers our infants’ life in terms of various aspects. The essay will manifest the reasons why I am convinced that
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outweighs its positivity.
To begin
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which are most likely targeted
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them to be violent.
In other words
, it can be said that the designers of video
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violent content in the game context. A prime example of
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game, where the success of its challenge is mainly depending on committing horrible crimes
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as robbing, stealing and killing and destroying.
Thus
, it can be said that
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applications and
games
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legal age.
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adolescents have a difficulty in the way of
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with people. To explain, the more spent time on phones, the less time they have to have a good conversation
that is
full of fun, emotions and good memories with
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family and
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friends which
consequently
leads to bad psychological issues
such
as autism and depression from
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age. As per a survey
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a group of university students in Egypt, a large scale of infants under
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of 15 years old is preferring to be socially separated and not
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to others.
Hence
, parents should monitor their adolescents and always try to enhance their morals and
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. In conclusion, after the essay has illustrated the mentioned reasons above, it can be said that not only the regulations on
games
and applications will be the solution to that issue, but
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also
the supervision of guardians on their infants and setting a plan for tuning their attitude.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • smartphones
  • usage
  • technology
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • entertainment
  • gaming
  • social media
  • communication
  • educational resources
  • addiction
  • dependence
  • negative effects
  • physical health
  • mental health
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