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Some people believe that they should keep all the money they have earned and should not pay tox to the state. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #money #tox
I disagree with the statement that individuals should not pay
taxes
 to the state. The
government
 runs
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the country
thecountry
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the country
 from the
taxes
 it collects.
Taxes
 are collected only from those who earn above a certain minimum limit.
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 is our moral duty to pay
taxes
.
Tax
 money collected by
government
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the government
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 is used to fund basic amenities, provide various services to citizens and for
government
 administration and projects, running of jails and
defense
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system
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, and many other operations.
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It
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 is not wrong to say that "
taxes
 run a
country
."
Thus
, it is very important for a
government
 to make
people
 pay
taxes
. Let us analyze why
people
 do not want to pay
taxes
. The main reason is their dissatisfaction with
government
 in serving them. They blame
government
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 for things like lack of infrastructure, poverty and unemployment, but they are not completely wrong as
tax
 revenue is misused in some or the other way in every
country
. ln developed countries,
however
, because of higher satisfaction from
government's
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 functioning, citizens may be more willing to pay
taxes
. Another factor generating dissatisfaction is the
tax
 structure itself. Often the
tax
 system is complex and it drives
people
 away from paying
taxes
.
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 is
also
 felt that the
tax
 rates are high and
tax
 slabs are unequal. So they feel it is not unethical if one goes for
tax
 avoidance or
tax
 evasion. Not paying
taxes
 can drastically affect a
country
's revenue generation, my own
country
,
lndia
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India
, for that matter. But
then
, it is equally desired that
government
 come up with a fair
tax
 structure and
also
 make
people
 aware
where
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 the
taxes
 are being diverted. Even lowering the
tax
 rates can help a
country
 increase its
tax
 collection as it would increase compliance among
the
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taxpayers.
Tax
 reform should
also
 be fast so that no public grievance or non-compliance remains for long. A proper
tax
 system backed up with strict
tax
 laws can produce the best results. Summing up, I reiterate my opinion by saying that it is the duty of every citizen to pay
tax
 and the duty of every
government
 to use it appropriately in
public
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 interest.
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